Wednesday, January 14, 2009

Sentence Comblining

*Cole shuddered. Cole had another spasm. He had chills. Rosy shoved Edwin. The shove was light.

Cole shuddered while he had another spasm and Rosy shoved Edwin lightly.

*Cole sipped water.The water was in a glass. She held the glass to his lips. He struggled to swallow the pills.

Cole sipped water in a glass as he held the glass to his lips while he struggled to swallow the pills.

* Cole closed his eyes. Rosy cleaned his wounds. Rosy bandaged his wounds. His wounds were open.

Rosy cleaned and banged Cole's wounds because they were open.

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